Peer Review: BlogPost #7
Day 1: Endangered Species
> What Works: This particular presentation about endangered species around the world, and how the human race has a major impact on the declining of some animals does a great job providing definition, facts, and and statistical data as supporting evidence of her key points
>What Does Not Work: Although the writer uses several statistics as evidence for her topic, there seems to be an over exposure to statistics rather than focusing on each individual point.
>Improvement Needed: The writer needs to focus on ways to clarify her claim/thesis statement.
Day 2: Rap is Controversial
> What Works: In this presentation, the writer implements a unique sense of style and maintains organization of the three key-focus points of the topic.
> What Does Not Work: Thesis statement that the writer uses does not explicitly state his position in reference to the topic.
> Improvement Needed: The research question that the writer developed needs to coordinate with the claim/thesis statement.
My Presentation: Marriage: Positive Consequences vs. Negative Consequences
Good News: I was consistent in organization of the 3 key focus points, of my topic and successfully developed a research question that coordinates with my thesis/claim. I also made effort to include a works cited.
Bad News: Although i included a works cited page, the information provided does not provide any facts or statistics as strong evidence to support the 3 keys points. Also the font size and style were not consistent.
Sources Referenced: Research Proposal Presentations, March 27-29 2018
Image: Adobe Fireworks CC 2015
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